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Judgement by ~poeticider:iconpoeticider:

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Judgement

The hungry masses cut through my old dreams like a sword through flesh,
their withered faces looking onward in the only way they can
look at her, at how she begs for water,
her ribcage protruding and her face well weathered
she cannot be more than four

Restlessly, tossing and turning
I see those haunted faces
staring back at me,
faces I now presume dead

I look down from my tower with the face of a seer
a boy runs from police with what looks like a shelf
the girl shoved aside she screams in fear
and for the first time she see’s me and I ask myself,
“for what reason is she down there and I up here?”
©2009 ~poeticider
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based on a true story.

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=sleyf Jun 24, 2009, 2:03:18 AM
Wow tell me what happened, you got me really interested now

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~poeticider Jun 24, 2009, 11:41:19 AM
its somthing this guy told me who i met in cusco-he was an indian whod grown up in america, so despite living there his family always had to commute back to india. i was really touched by his story of how he said he used to sit on his balcony for hours and hours as a child in there house in india just staring at the slums below and trying to understand why they were in the slums and he was in this posh house....so anyway thats what the poems about =)

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~Semeni Jun 25, 2009, 9:35:53 AM
The last stanze rhymes really well but the others dont lol. Its good :)

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~poeticider Jun 25, 2009, 2:13:20 PM
yah, i like making poems in parts like that, this one has 3 and yeh only the last ones meant to rhyme. cheers =)

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~poeticider Jun 25, 2009, 2:14:18 PM
hmmm...fireworks

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~Semeni Jun 26, 2009, 2:58:32 PM
:) no probs :)

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You visit my gallery, yes? You wont regret it... I hope :XD:

Patience is a virtue. Without it we are intolerable.

Please visit my friend, hes a really good artist! :D :nod: [link]
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=sleyf Jul 4, 2009, 5:21:47 AM
A friend of mine who came from India said that it was kind of sad when the beggars come over to you. I mean it's horrible to think about how some people are living so badly, but then again, what can we do aside from turn communist and all loose everything to be equal (even then people will still be in poverty) the problem is, that so much aid is going out, but corrupt governments aren't giving that aid to their people, lie many countries in africa, they only give a small percentage of charity they receive to their people, keeping the rest for themselves. The truth is that there will always be poverty

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Spare a crumb. Please be kind and visit my gallery.

"A desperate man will believe in anything, if it means he can live forever."
-Zantair-

Darn it...like a sock!
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~poeticider Jul 5, 2009, 9:06:11 AM
i cant remember its name but i remember watching a brilliant film about a sniper in stalingrad in WW2. it gave a great example of how communism does not make people equal-people will always be different some will be unlucky in love some will struggle with freinds, so equality will always be impossible unless we hav no freewill and a single mindset (1984 anyone?) but yeh here in peru ive seen plenty of poverty, thou i doubt its nothing like in india. A common one are rural people who have had no tools so have had to use there hands to dig the earth and eventually there fingers come out looking like hooks, and once like that they simply cant use there fingers properly, cant work and are forced to beg. its really sad stuff

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